Saturday, January 22, 2011

Foolish hope

 

Killing is crime
You’ve killed my soul

    Love is like war
    Everything is fair, o dear

I gave you all my love
But you betrayed me

    You knew I flirt
    What'd you expect from me?

I thought you would change
My love would compel you
   
    Ha! Love's an artistic word 
    Wake up, it has failed you

Will not you come back to me?
I will wait for you

    My life's like a journey in rosy garden
    Every day I start anew

You'll come back to me
If my love is true

    You believe not me but your stupid heart
    Poor chap, your love has again betrayed you...

23 comments:

  1. wow!
    such is life..
    i like the way you have strung up the words..

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  2. Such is the heart that clings to its illusion. It is not the love that betrays, its the heart that misinterprets.

    Very nice lines.

    Cheers,
    Blasphemous Aesthete

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  3. its just wow!
    loved it.....keep blogging...:)

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  4. @TangyOrangeSour, B'Asthete, Clouds,
    Thank you :)

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  5. The two way conversation, put into verses, was impressive.

    Love is ambiguous, the feeling or emotion, whatever you may term it; and even the word is so.

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  6. @Sayak
    Thanks. Welcome to my blog.

    yea, everyone's definition of love could be different...sometimes it also takes form of over protectiveness...it's not "simple"..

    Thanks for reading and commenting. keep visiting :)

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  7. ?Nice
    Innovative and superlike.,...

    I can understand :P

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  8. @Tarun
    Thanks...
    I can understand :P ?what?
    @Anu
    Thanks :)

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  9. Wise words in few words :) Very nice .. I liked the conversational style :D

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  10. So the poem was a completely bouncer for me. I don't get it. Sort of got the meaning, but disagreed with a lot of it. Especially the last line "your love has again betrayed you". Was it even love????

    Mia

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  11. @Mia
    I wish I could have made it much better to understand...actaully here I have tried to put the inner voice of a girl who's in love with an unfaithful guy.

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  12. nice poem...but i just have a question...it might sound stupid...but why is it that always a guy is portrayed to be unfaithful... :O

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  13. more i think
    greater i sink,i am real trouble.life takes me 2 new page every day . u cover my whole life ..with few words 2 spare.
    u r photographer or u r programmer... kudos to u r effort ...megha

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  14. You have written it quite nicely, and I actually find it really creative. I was confused with the italics and I thought that was the guy's portion, so I wasn't sure about chap in the last line. Either way please don't get rid of the italics, if you do write another poem next time. I liked how you had two different perspectives running at the same.

    Agree with Unruly Rebel! Girls these days aren't faithful too.

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  15. @unruly rebel
    Thanks.
    yea, its not that guys are the unfaithful always, but in case of infidelity, you will find guys more than girls.

    @abhijit
    so u r the guy that gives the girls the nightmares ;) what's the latest count?

    & thanks for the compliment...when u have interest, things work out itself :)

    @Mia
    Good that I got it conveyed to u :) keep giving me the honest opinion, it counts :)

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  16. so u r the guy that gives the girls the nightmares ;) what's the latest count?
    hahahahah good one ..
    i really did nt got u ....

    i just saw u r photograph they r just amazing ......do u have any new one ...tc ..cya ...

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  17. @abhijit,
    seems v both were refering something different while commenting ;)
    the poetry was about infidelity and u said it's like your life ;)

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  18. extremely sorry for that ....i wanted 2 say something else..actually all u r blogs is full of life virtual facts. which every every one undergoes but only few can express .and one of them is u.whenever i read u r blogs,i felt each and every line is written for me..mag when can we expect navin kavita ...

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  19. lovely words..here for the first time. nice log :)
    take care n hugs

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